Page Princess: THE ALPHA'S MAIL-ORDER BRIDE by Jasmine White

Title: THE ALPHA’S MAIL ORDER BRIDE

Series: The Alpha’s Mail Order Bride #1

Author: Jasmine White

Publish Date: 04.11.14

Publisher: Jasmine White

Category /Genre: Paranormal Romance, BBW

Recommended for: 18+ due to sexual content

Received from: Amazon purchase

Goodreads link: The Alpha’s Mail Order Bride

Date completed: 01.25.15

Description from the publisher:

Nashoba is the Alpha of his werewolf tribe, however his tribe is in trouble. He must find a mate as soon as possible and she MUST be a human woman. As things get desperate he places an advert on Craigslist and is surprised when he finally gets a response.

Akala is no stranger to a thrill but she really had no idea what she was letting herself in for this time. Her curiosity got the better of her as she found herself answering an advert on Craigslist that she assumed was a fake however it is anything but that......

And so it is only when Akala arrives and meets the sexy Nashoba for the first time that she begins to realize that he is no ordinary man. She is about to discover why he and his tribe really want her and the truth might just kill her....

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Notes: This is part 1 of the trilogy. This is a paranormal shifter romance with a mail order bride theme. Please only read if these themes interest you.

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This is the first in a trilogy of books that will need to be read in order.

Late at night, while procrastinating the writing of an assignment for a client, Akela is checking her social media and perusing Craigslist. She knows that most of the MSW ads are cheating men looking for a little action on the side, but if nothing else she may find a good laugh. Instead, one of the ads seems to be more than sincere – with proper grammar and spelling as a further attraction. Nashoba had placed the ad in desperation to find his mate to help lead his tribe. Taking a risk, Akela answers the ad for a cross-country blind date. After several emails, she agrees to leave Washington state to visit his town in Colorado. Will his secrets be the deal-breaker that sends Akela home?

I liked the story very much, but greater character development was needed for both Nashoba and Akela. Why are they both so alone in the world? Even spending more time on the treasure hunt would have developed more feelings for our two main characters. What is Justin’s story? It is alluded to, but not truly termed to satisfaction. On the other hand, the scenery is well-described and Nashoba’s cousin Haley is a little more relatable. She is just adorable and very involved in making Adela and Nashoba feel comfortable during their dates.

The book needs a good editing (car brakes, not car breaks, etc.). One example of what should have been pointed out in even a perfunctory editing would be, “As she lay there in the grass absentmindedly plaiting grass together, she looked over to where Nashoba lay on his back,…” There are two errors in that very short passage. I would have recommended “As she lay there in the grass absent-mindedly plaiting blades together, she looked over to where Nashoba lay on his back…”

The true climax to the story came in the epilogue and left you with a cliff-hanger. I don’t mind cliffies, especially when I know I’m reading a trilogy, but this one felt too unfinished. I would have recommended making that the last chapter and your epilogue could either be Akela’s feelings of defeat and longing or the women’s first impression of the new camp where they are being held.

Grammar/editing: C – average writing, poorly edited

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